ohh... another expressive piece... it's lovely Cool-Not-Crazy... it's just saddening for those who know what you're goin' through at the moment...

as far as structural poetry, this has rythm, timing, and a beat. Emotionally... it's expressive, sad and almost pitable...

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"There once was a man from Peru
Who dreamed he was eating his shoe
He woke with a fright
In the middle of the night
To realize his dream had come true." ~ SpongeBob SquarePants

I really don't know what I should do. Think i'm going to start trying to hide my emotions, because really it hurts more when... when you show your emotions and then get punched in the face. If you just take the punch without any feeling, then you still have your pride. I feel so pathetic, calling him like I did. Not saying bye just to keep him on the phone alittle longer. Well, it won't happen anymore. Because it hurts so much when he says 'lease don't start that again, your ruining out whole conversation because all i remember is the struggle to get you off the phone' and the way he said 'I never had anyone need me like this' like I was just... some stupid weakling who was bringing him down. Well I'm not weak. Used to be he wanted me to open up to him and all, but now... Forget it. Because when I'm closed, then nothing can touch me and hurt me. I'm so different now. Michigan has seen the difference in me, and so have I. I don't know if its a good change or not, but at least I'm not crying pathetically and shaking like an earthquake anymore. I don't even blink. My voice doesn't change like it used to with my emotion. Just the same tone all around. But still, I guess the people that want to know what I'm feeling, thinking, or whatever'll read my poems. Because what goes on inside is always the same.

Did you like the metephores and imagery and all?

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They say that money doesn't grow on trees, but, Dude, you can make money selling fruit!

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yes, i did like the description.. Very passionate metaphors those r always good for the audience to REALLY get a sense of what is being expressed...

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"There once was a man from Peru
Who dreamed he was eating his shoe
He woke with a fright
In the middle of the night
To realize his dream had come true." ~ SpongeBob SquarePants

Sorry about that... just needed to get some thoughts out. I probably shouldn't have put that all on you.

I'm glad you liked it. I don't even know whats going through my mind til i get it down on paper.

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They say that money doesn't grow on trees, but, Dude, you can make money selling fruit!

No need to be sorry my brother once told me, "Never to be sorry if you haven't done something wrong."


All you did was express yourself and share your feelings with the world; that's what art is. A form of communication... you didn't "put anything on" me at all... you just communicated and shared what was in your heart; nothing wrong with that at all

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"There once was a man from Peru
Who dreamed he was eating his shoe
He woke with a fright
In the middle of the night
To realize his dream had come true." ~ SpongeBob SquarePants

hey I can tell that your and your soulmates relationship is stressed. Things will work out. don't worry!

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"Right handed men don't hold it with their left."
-GATACCA

Wow, its a grat poem just a shame its these emotions you have to feel. your not getting weeker your getting stronger, its harder to express your feelings then it is to keep them bottled up.
and megbeth you have a very wise family
i really hope things work out for you and your solemate and family cool-not-crazy. <^*.*^>

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When humanity turns its back on you, kick its arse and laugh.

i feel the same

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What if this weren't a hypothetical question?

i feel for you
i know what your going through
i am too
dun be sad you are strong
im here for you
good poem btw i love it

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*Live Laugh Love TRIPP*

~if i tell you then i'd have to kill you~


=razors pain you=
=rivers are damp=
=acid stains you=
=drugs cause cramp=
=guns arent lawful=
=nooses give=
=gas smells awful=
=you might as well live=

Much Dark Love
~~Lena